But the spelling and use of punctuation was needed and also you could use some more descriptive words. Examples of Popular Metaphors All the worlds a stage, and all the men and women merely players. William Shakespeare I am the good shepherdand I lay down my life for the sheep. The Bible, John 10:14-15 All our words are but crumbs that fall down from the feast of the mind.Khalil Gibran your bedroom is like the inside of your head (simile). We have a small sister that isnt allowed in but she comes in anyway. And it sits on the other side of the room! Although there are many flaws in my room, Im still tolerating them. It's Romeo's line about his inamorata: "Juliet is the sun." SHADYNS BEDROOM I love my room and everyone loves their room but me living in newly renovated garage is great but has some downsides to it. You have described it so accurately. On my desk there lies a golden skull candle. Love the story love the writer the use of strong, adventurous adjectives eg horrifically untidy, musty, unfresh, and colour descriptions eg bright red, light, creamy, dark coloured are great. So my layout might be tight, but it works for me. Im looking at my animal pillows and paying attention to the detail, their touch is soft like a piece of silk and the zip that's holding the stuffing in the zip is sharp and has a cold feeling. Then let's go on this virtual tour of my bedroom. The only errors I could see was that you wrote picture instead of pictures. But I enjoyed reading this but you keep spelling "color" the wrong way it's "colour.". My curtains are white with a see through sort of material over top. The Five Imdb Parents Guide, Dotted around my room are a bunch of different things. NSL: be more bold with good words to catch the readers attention and to take them on a journey. Roman blinds with large, bold coloured birds of many forms. To the right of my bed is my bedside table, then my desk and finally my drawers. My curtains are dark blue so if a have a sleep in the day it seems like it's night. Similarly, if you are homeschooled or do schooling over the internet, then your home might both metaphorically and literally be a classroom! You have made a great job of describing your room and I liked honesty with regards to your (constantly) unmade bed. It is the most modern part of my entire house because it has recently been renovated from the garage that was never used. Im about to take you on a tour around my room. Yas finally im home, don't you just love after a long day at school you can race to you bedroom and just chill out on your bed. Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics, The best part about having a themed bedroom is that it makes me more relaxed when I come home from a long day at school. Harriets Bedroom My bedroom is in the south end of the hose and it faces southwest. The cleanliness of my room is not so good. Secondly, the wall decorations. The best metaphors come from the heart. Another factor of how my room can look so messy is because of the creamy white colored walls! Consider the classic sayings "love is blind" and "patience is a virtue." Whichever it is, Im going to take you on a virtual tour of my bedroom. All together I love my room because it is how I want it, its layout is how i want it, its smells okay,the accessories are good, and the theme is perfect. (My hands feel very cold.) I enjoy the fact that everything is very detailed in the way of being described. This crossword clue Metaphor for Out my east facing window you can see the black and white calves frolicking through the lush green grass in the paddock and the different coloured cars zooming down Thompsons Track. The carpet packs a warm feel to the room as it completes it and gives it a nice finish. Furniture is one of the biggest features of the room. Its plywood walls and lumpy concrete floor give it a rugged and unique feel. The Ideas are relevant but I would like to see more elaborated Ideas in the text. My messy bed is on the far wall furthest away from the cream white door with an old wooden dresser at the end. Good work I don't think you need to improve. Feels very hot. Thirdly, the colors. But all of this is because the entire house is new, in fact it's not even finished!, although with all these bonuses I don't go into my bedroom that often. He is a pig. And I would try and keep it a bit more tidy! It has a dark theme and it has black sheets and gray covers. The laws don't apply to my imagination except for the time to clean your room law. I suck creamy cock. My animal sketches hanging on my wall and blowing in a winter breeze were only done in black and white. Its a big room, but when shared and halved, the stomping grounds are rather small, which also means little mess in little space looks like big mess. We dont need all these lights on!. Nice work Kaia! Posters are another thing people have in their room, in my room I have one poster of a 3D of a coral reef. On it there are two pictures both a light green in background with pink and yellow tulips. But one particular sport the theme is based on is Basketball. In my room and on my bedside table there are books like The Hunger Games, Harry Potter and the Cursed Child, and a Top Gear magazine the Harry Potter book is yellowy orange with wooden woven ball with a child inside on the front cover, the Top Gear magazine has a red Aston Martin DB 12 with a caption saying Cruise Missile, on my desk there is a yellow Ferrari model which I got when I was born. eg Self fun. My layout, I think the layout of my room is perfect because my cabin bed, like the top half of of a bunk bed, is at the far end and looking over the entire room, apart from what's underneath it. So try using better descriptive words. It is one of the few places I feel confident to be me and feel as though no-one else can touch me. And I don't have to worry about other siblings entering my space. There's flower patterns everywhere and unique designs on my furniture. On the left behind the wall, you can see a lot of lego and a few book and also a bean bag. R5. But besides from that it is an awesome room and I love it. My walls are a light gray with light gray carpet but also my sheets on my bed are gray as well. It might not seem like your average 13 year old bedroom because really this bedroom wasn't even for me, it was meant to be a spare room. My duvet is new as I got it when we moved house. It's unique to me and cosy for my cat it's one of my favourite rooms in the house and has all the colours that I think fits me. My parents make me keep it tidy for good habits. Writers usually describe the setting at the very start of a story. You have done well to describe your room. You have had a few rooms in your life and you know how to to make yourself feel at home easily. I liked how you had good ideas in your writing but you didn't have that many. I really liked your description about your bedroom. All of my decorations are placed to make my room look even better. 4. Then I set up a place to do stuff I love to do such as playing on my ipod, read books, play with lego, do trick shots and the funnest thing is well sleep. It holds over 40 books as well as countless keepsakes, wires and old toys. But over all, I like my room. So my cabinet in the corner it's a old wooden cabinet which just holds all my clothes. it is very interesting and the punctuation is really good but you stroll into your room hop in your bed and then stroll into your room again so it sought of jumped around. My rooms walls are two different colours. The colours in your room must be very bright with the sun on it and I can visualise your room. My bed is really soft and comfy, just the way I like it. LOGANS BEDROOM Your description was enjoyable to read. From an outside point of view, it seems to be arranged in an orderly fashion. I almost feel bad for the things that have slided down the back and not found until the layout of my room changes. If you want to read a book from my bookshelf you can, but most of the good ones probably would've slipped down behind it,along with anything you sit on top of my bookshelf. Not quite how I see your room - it is a typical boys bedroom with a LOT of mess on the floor and you also forgot to say that you chuck stuff under your bed as well as the "random drawers"! I like how big my room is because its a good size for me to just lay on the ground and play on my devices or read. you could add a bit more information. I hop into my cosy bed. The reason for this is that we only moved last month so things still need to be put up. It also has another mattress underneath that has wheels on it. I didn't find any "I's" that were not capitals. Overall I love my room. In the corner on one side there is a small mirror and above it a poster of my name, that reminds me who I am everyday when I see it. I peer out the window and see the light reflecting itself on the lake and the wind creating ripples in the water. Right next to my bed is a little brown, wooden bedside table where I keep my phone, clock and other items. Lastly how it looks. Then your eyes are carried to my dark coloured wooden dresser underneath the back window to the left. I have a chair that is very sturdy but comfortable and a table which is birch with white markings and has a curve on the end. I like spending time in my room, because I like having my own space and its a good place to be by myself. There is a slight problem with my room. In my room I have a cactus and a succulent plant on my bedside table. Ruebens bedroom I hear it as push all your cloths under your bed and chuck them in your wardrobe. I have two windows in my room one facing straight ahead of you as you walk in and the other one above the bed. My bed is on the other side of the room behind the door, and my bedside table with my draws with my dvd player and some clothes. I wouldnt mind a bigger bed, though! That is why I think my bedroom is the best place in the house. However your vocabulary could still improve to help the readers to have a clearer picture of what your bedroom looks like. Personally I love all the things in my bedroom but just not the way they are set out. Then, you can say your home is a zoo (or a swamp or a classroom, or whatever!) Next to that is a deceptive worktop. You have described some things though. This final piece of text will be explaining the lighting. Everyone wants to have the perfect bedroom, the best way to do that is to make it your own. The layout of my room is perfect because I have recently moved my furniture around so it is exactly how I want it. my clothes. My wardrobe the mirror is all dusty with had prints all over it and inside it has rubbish, all my rugby gear, ski gear and more clothes. I have modern tropical theme with orange and blue striped sheets with a blue duva. The final piece of furniture your eyes get drawn to is my bed. At the bottom of the bed I have a bright red cover I keep it there just in case there's a cold night so if there is I can pull it over my bed for more warmth. My walls are light blue and my ceiling is white. I love the furniture in my room it makes it feel as if I am in a dream. E.g pain main, Logan you had lots of spelling mistakes like you said flour instead of floor and 'i's not 'I' \. As Ive already said I have a painting of Clifton Beach hanging above my bed, it is landscape and the colours combinations are awesome. But the only bad thing about it is that I have to share it with my 3 year old brother Jackson. You used capital letters in the right places and a few different types of punctuation. I have a white bedside table with an alarm clock, a rose red touch lamp, and a blue bluetooth speaker. Although this also gets used by my sister who also The house is an old homestead and the wood has a great chestnut kind of color. When you say your home is a swamp, you usually mean that its messy, dark, and maybe even a little smelly. Sometimes I come home and I see the floor for once because my Mum hates the mess I make in the room. and there is no conclusion or ending paragraph. I have a couple of lamps hidden around the room so when its dark it makes this cool effect. 8. as rough as a cob. Then, you were talking about how the home had turned into a place of work. Looking around my room, I notice the layout, it is a large square shaped room with enough room to do a cartwheel in. After a long day, all i want to do is go up tom my cosy bedroom and either listen to some mellow music, or lie down, unwind and watch a bit of T.V or maybe even a relaxing film. The bright stuff in my room are mainly the walls, desk and drawers, my room gets a lot brighter when I open the curtains because my windows are a basically a wall itself, but with a window that big everything ends up being brighter during the day and night in the summer which is a problem (even with the curtains pulled). They are covered in all kinds of hangings that make the room mine. Overall it's ok but you repeat your facts. Accessories in my room are very special to me. The creamy brown carpet is pleasant. One the style two how clean it is three my senses and finally my furniture. Great writing Shadyn really liked it, I still ant that ps4 of yours though! Chargers, Polaroid, medals and cards are a big part of my accessories. The layout of my bedroom has my bed in the middle and then there is a gap between my brown clothes draw and my bed. They are stacked up quite messily. as your beautiful grey carpet is covered with clothes sometimes! Then theres my laundry basket that is white with lots of clothes in it. Your punctuation was good. Jackson's dresser is really new and its still in good condition. So, if you referred to your home as a retreat, you would be saying that your home is a peaceful place to escape from the world belong. Pretty good if only you could see how i see your bedroom. My room is not too empty but its not too full either. I dont know if food plates count as accessories because if they do i have a lot of accessories. I need to make sure the cloths are not on my desk they need to be in my dresser or in my closet. Your ideas are relevant Alex, you have described what it looks well. Now heres why everything is where it is, so both king single beds are right up against the creamy walls because well I dont really enjoy having my annoying sister in my room but mum says she has to so I tried to keep us as far apart as possible. I also have a pin board where I can pin on some memories, art and events to come. The other decoration in bedroom is my average size mirror which has lots of writing on it so I can remember what I need to do. For me and my sisters to fit in our room the room has to be laid out a specific way, but it is pretty comfy. And for the final part of my bedroom the accessories. On my bed I have, to be precise three cushions and two pillows that are all multi coloured. My lampshade is very modern with its black and white zig zag pattern to match my zig zag patterned drawers. But at one point you said in your accessories paragraph "But they aren't dirty they are actually quite clean all thanks to my dog." 4, I like how you describe where the objects in your room where. I dont like having my room messy but no-one wants to clean their room right? Well structured paragraphs and a few funny jokes too. Personally . next time leave out the details about the dust! 4-. Color, my room has color in the right spot my walls match my carpet the carpet matches the color of my beds wood underneath the mattress and my bed matches my dutchess. This description is on how my room looks now with the layout, accessories, furniture and colours. Youll find that my beds always made in the morning, and the clothes arent all scattered across the floor unlike the rest of my family. I have this there because well I play games alot. My room is the perfect size for all my things and for me and thats how I like it. I understand why mum doesn't like me being in my room too much. Next to that rug is my bean bag which is blue with a flame on it which is also blue. I think Emma used lots of punctuation and i liked haw she told us exactly were her room was. It might not be your typical 13 year old bedroom because it's a spare room. I usually put it on my birch table. The only messy things in my room is my carpet. You can sign in to vote the answer. 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